First here are the rules
February 10th - Friday - Emotion Flash Fiction: Emotion is the engine of a story. Pick an emotion and in a flash fiction piece of 250 words MAKE us feel it! We want to connect with your character. This will be a challenge in 250 words.
Yay, I'm so excited about this one!! Today's challenge 3 of the bloghop and I am ready. I hated having to choose which scene to use. I had it narrowed down to three scenes, but this was the one that ripped my heart out, so in the interest of an emotional scene here you go. *spoiler alert*
Here's my 'Flash Fiction' from my WIP- Impenetrable
MC- Gabriyel (age 17), Supporting Character- Maria (his mentor- age 40)
Gabriyel's eyes ran with liquid, though he wasn’t sure if it was tears or blood pouring down his face. He dropped to his knees and fell onto his hands, needing the strength of all four limbs to remain upright. Forcing himself to look up, he searched the dark, desperately needing to know the fate of his friends before his own sucked him into oblivion.
It wasn’t hard to find Maria, he just listened for the clanging of metal. She was high up on the cliff’s edge, fighting gloriously. The double moons shined down upon her, as if spot-lights pointing toward the star of the show. And what a star she was. She seemed to dance between her opponents, gliding gracefully past them as they charged her, five to one. The ground around her was littered with bodies of those who dared to challenge her. Even now, she quickly annihilated three men with a few thrusts of her sword.
Maybe there is hope.
Gabriyel’s lips curled, or at least he thought he was smiling, though he was quickly losing sensation as death gripped him. He heaved again, struggling for oxygen as blood continued to drown his lungs. But he kept his eyes locked on Maria, wanting his last vision to be of her victory.
Suddenly a man was behind her and before Gabriyel could register his swift movement, the man slid a knife into Maria’s spine and she collapsed.
Gabriyel's world shattered and he welcomed the release death would bring.
Okay that was a clip from a tragic scene in my wip. Did you feel lost and hopeless? I know Gabriyel does. Hope you enjoyed it, well actually I hope you felt the emotion which means you should feel like crap right now. haha --sorry to be a bummer, but I promise my entire ms isn't this way, this was just an intense moment short enough for the 250 word limit. (oh and I love comments:)